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Sneak Preview: Tormented
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September 07,2008 by Dustin
Warning: The subject matter contained within this story is for mature viewers only and may contain some things that will violently disturb viewers of all kinds. Included but not limited to are some of the following things that will appear in the story. Child abuse, Rape (possibly involving children), Graphic violence, explicit detailing of horrible events of all kinds including much of the above, death, extreme brutality, extremely disturbing material, and torture. These are but a very few things as there are more.

I have given fair warning to all and would like to add just because a character does something horrid within the material does not mean I agree with it at all. It is a story, try to keep that in mind. If you are offended by anything then don't read any further. Viewer and reader discretion is advised SEVERELY!

Thank you all for your support! Cheers! =)



Prologue

The sound of the jingle coming from an ice cream truck woke Valyrie West up. Her head was throbbing and soon enough she noticed her family was missing. Her husband Mike, and her two children, Sarah and Dante were now missing. Valyrie brushed some of the dirt out of her long red hair and quickly stood to her feet. The 27 year old woman was a graphic designer and had the week off in which she decided to take her family to New York City, her hometown to spend the week together shopping and doing whatever came to mind for them.

It was evident by the dust covering her long black baggy pants as well as her white sleeveless top t shirt that wherever she had awoken was old and dilapidated. Valyrie wore an old black coat much like the type a reporter or even a detective in a noir would wear. The coat was long enough to almost completely touch the ground as Valyrie only stood at 5'6'' tall. Her beautiful white skin was not pale but healthy however it was not tan either. It fit her red hair quite well enough and as Valyrie now gazed around with her brown eyes scanning the area around her she soon realized she was in a carnival of some kind.

All around there was rust colored textures filled with red that looked like blood and pools of black streaking across the ground in spots vanishing away into the shadows ahead. Valyrie was uncertain of what was going on or how she got there and could begin to feel panic and fear trying to rise up within her for which she did her best not to show. The faint sound of an ice cream truck could once again be heard off into the distant shadows.

Stepping forwards now towards the sound Valyrie soon heard the laughs of children as though excited to see an ice cream truck that she could not yet see. She also took note of the fact there appeared to be no one around although she could clearly hear both the tune of the ice cream truck and the laughter of children which only grew louder as she got closer to the shadows ahead. Soon enough lights came on in the shadows from street lights not previously seen before and revealed far away an old dust ridden and decayed looking ice cream truck.

The tune grew louder as Valyrie stepped closer to the truck which remained motionless and continued to play it's tune. "Hello!" The tune played on and the childrens laughter grew louder but there was no response to Valyrie at all. Fear grew within her and she began to get a bad feeling. Every step closer the tune grew louder but now it grew distorted. Valyrie reached the truck and tried to look inside at which point she heard the tune soon drop to silence and the childrens laughter fell silent as well.

Valyrie felt her heart pounding in her chest as she brushed away cob webs and heavy dust from the back windows of the old truck. Through the dirt which made it still very difficult to see within despite the brushing away she did of most of it, Valyrie saw a man with his back to her. He was heavy and looked huge. The tune to the ice cream truck began to start again and soon enough there were screams coming from the previously laughing children.

Valyrie soon saw a girl that looked to be about 12 or 13 in a black dress appear out of thin air inside the truck. She looked so real though and the man in the truck now vanished and reappeared facing the direction of Valyrie and the little girl who now looked at Valyrie as well with a heavy breathing and panting banging on the back doors of the truck for help. "PLEASE! Unlock the doors! Help me, PLEASE!" The girl continued to scream and bang and Valyrie tried opening the doors but could not. They were stuck and soon the big hand of the man behind the girl grabbed her and dragged her back screaming!

"Pleas e Ice Cream Man, I don't want this! I don't want anymore ice cream and I don't want to die!" The girl was now on her back facing him and crying in fear. Her tears were highly visible and Valyrie wanted to look away but was shocked and to afraid to move. The Ice Cream Man soon dropped his pants and forced his penis down the poor girls throat continually thrusting it in and out before pulling it out to hear her screams again! The more she screamed the more pleasure he took and the more she cried the more he seemed to like it. He said nothing and his face could not be seen but the screams made Valyrie sick and witnessing this she wished she could just turn away.

The girl was soon turned around and raped in her ass for more than five minutes as she screamed and cried for help looking Valyrie in the eyes and reaching out scratching to get away. "HELP ME PLEASE!" Valyrie had covered her mouth and was now crying herself as she watched the Ice Cream Man once again turn the girl on her back and force his penis down her throat. He smiled with sick pleasure as he forced her to gag on himself and continued going. Soon enough he released and cum flew everywhere down her throat and on her face.

The little girl threw some up and tried to run for the door again however she was grabbed yet again and this time beaten brutally. The Ice Cream Man pulled his pants up and soon picked her up by her face and slammed the girl against the side of the wall kissing her before smacking her across the face with his fist. The young girl screamed was picked up and dragged by her hair before being thrown down against a bench inside the truck. Then she was strung up by the hands with barb wire onto a little hole welded into the side of the truck. The girls clothes were ripped off now and she was now staring in fear at the hulking figure before her.

The figure now came close and sat on a bar stool for which he kept right in front of the girl. His pants were up for the time and now he looked at her with pliers and a carving knife in his hand. Setting down the carving knife he soon grabbed the girl who was still screaming, by the chin and opened her mouth soon taking his pliers and ripping one of her teeth clean out of her mouth. Blood poured from her mouth and the girl screamed in pain. The Ice Cream Man quickly grabbed a sledge hammer he had on the floor next to him and crushed both the girls legs and knee caps!

The girl let out a scream like no other and soon was silenced when the man set the hammer down again and took his carving knife out again, cutting the girls tongue clear out of her mouth making her scream distorted. Blood poured from her mouth as the Ice Cream Man now rubbed her breasts and felt her gently all the while mastrubating until he released all over her. He then unstrung her and rubbed her face in the left over secretion forcing her to taste it with her lips before he dragged her over to the back door and slammed her face against the window all the while holding her up with his own strength the entire time being she no longer could stand up herself.

Valyrie watched the poor girl as she looked Valyrie in the eyes crying and scratching against the glass window pan. Blood and semen was what covered her lips. Then she cried out more as the Ice Cream man began raping her in the ass again. He felt her pain and loved every second of her pain. The girl screamed on like this for 13 more minutes as he raped her shaking the ice cream truck as he did. Looking into the girls pain and despair filled gaze, Valyrie did all she could to get in but couldn't get in still. She felt for the girl who was soon released into and her throat then slit afterwards until her head was now off her body and blood covered the windows of the truck. The entire time, Valyrie watched the girl cry and saw her sorrow.

Valyrie fell backwards and began crying and before she knew it the ice cream truck vanished before her eyes. In despair and having no clue where she had awoken or where her family was, Valyrie feared the worst and cried even harder still in shock at what she had just witnessed.

The poor innocent girl, such life, wasted and gone before her time. Valyrie now sat in a place completely unknown to her...alone.

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Velvet_Rose - 09/23/2008
Um, yeah, I know, I read the warnings, but sheesh... I didn't think it'd be THAT bad. Why is it whenever someone warns me (like with Fringe) I think, "Oh, it won't be that bad!" *TWO HOURS LATER* "Can't sleep!" Lol. Good work though. :)
Dustin - 09/23/2008
Why thank you my friend. :) Yes, I only put warnings up on my horror stories that will be extremely bad. No one seems to have taken heed to such a fact and many have been shocked just on how dark the beginning to this story is.

It is coming very soon lol. It will be a week from tomorrow.

Thank you and...

Cheers! =)
Dustin - 09/23/2008
Aww, sorry my friend. I put up all the warnings silly! Mmm...love how many people read it anyways despite the warning lol!

Anywho, I am glad you seemed to enjoy the story thus far and I can not wait to share it with everyone in October! October 1st my friend, it begins! =)
Velvet_Rose - 09/22/2008
Why in the holy hell did I decide to read that? And I wanted ice cream before this, damn it! Thanks a lot, Dustin. :P Okay... I will say it was well written and despite my better judgement I can't wait to read the rest. Although I think I'm going to avoid ice cream and/or sex for quite a while after this... O_o
*~Steph~*
TTMAB7 - 09/11/2008
Whew!

That was a rough one to read, and this comes from someone who's jaded! :)

I honestly have to say that I didn't 'enjoy' it, but in this case, that's actually a compliment. (I think horror is the only genre you can say that about, lol.)

It sounds like a good start to a story. I do like how you seem to have no limits to how far you will go. That in itself makes the story more frightening.

One little thing: unless the time plays a more important role later on, saying 'he did this for 5 minutes, he did that for 13 minutes' comes across as overly technical, and drew me out of the story a little. It seems like it would be more of an endless, horrifying blur, where time ceased to have any meaning. But that's just my own humble opinion. Make of it what you will. :)

I look forward to reading more. Good luck!
Dustin - 09/11/2008
Thank you yet again for your opinion and compliments and you know what. Your right...you bring up a very good point about the time thing. It does seem off. I appreciate the fact you noted that as it will help me out a great deal when writing more of that story.

I do not have any limits to what I do with horror. It is my favorite genre and definetly one of my best genres I write.

Thank you so much man and let me know if you need anything reviewed.

Cheers! =)
JEMoore - 09/07/2008
Yeah, I rated it, though someone neglected that fact when reading my excerpts, lmao! ;)
Dustin - 09/07/2008
I rated the first one. ;)
Dustin - 09/07/2008
Thank you Jackie! =)

It will be here for October however for now I'm writing a comedy called Get Willy!

LMAO! I'm having fun with it, though it is a huge departure from my normal sort of story.

Thank you for both the comment and the rating if indeed you were the one to rate it. I wish you the best and thank you so much for all your support yet again!

Cheers! =)
JEMoore - 09/07/2008
Well, I love the start of this story, Dustin. It's dark and creepy. You're right though does run kind of along the same lines as Grieve. Wrong place at the wrong time.

Have a great day!
 
 
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Tormented is an extremely dark and extremely mature horror short story coming to Impnow exclusively with it's first part as well as the rehash of the prologue, on October 1st, 2008.

The story follows 27 year old Valyrie West and her search for her family who is now missing after she awoke in an old dilapidated carnival with no memory of what brought her there. Unbeknowest to her at the time she is not as alone as things seem and her world is quickly rocked when she is shocked at having to witness an extremly brutal and disturbing event.

Searching for her family, answers, and escape she wanders deeper within the hell she finds herself in. What lies ahead will terrify and sicken anyone with a soul or care for anything. Will Valyrie find her family? Will she even survive long enough to find them?

Should she find her family...are they even still alive?

Read this October to find out!

Tormented is full of extreme acts of violence, rape to all ages, suffering, pain, misery, despair, death, torture, and everything in between.

PLEASE DO NOT READ IF YOU THINK YOU CAN'T HANDLE THE MATERIAL OR YOUR TOO YOUNG TO BE READING IT!

USE EXTREME DISCRETION WHEN READING OR VIEWING!

That is all.

Thank you all again for your support! Cheers! =)